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HOW I GOT INTO STANFORD – My Common App Essay (Accepted at Stanford, Johns Hopkins, etc)

hello everyone my name is Jasmine welcome to my channel I recently graduated high school and I am going to be attending Stanford University next fall and after I got in I got like a lot of like dams on my Instagram and stuff asking for advice and a lot of like just juniors and I know emailing me like asking to share my essays and stuff so I thought I was just fulfilling my high-school dream I’m starting a YouTube channel and I watched so many of these kind of videos when I was applying and honestly I feel like it is super helpful to kind of just hear different people’s essays because each person’s application is super unique and I think that’s really important to get into Stanford that your application is just like uniquely you and nobody else can really write the essays that you’re writing so I’m gonna be doing a lot of videos on my application and my advice like my personal stats and everything and then I’m also gonna be doing videos like once I’m actually at Stanford cuz I think that’d be super fun but now I’m just gonna for the today’s video just read my comment essay and kind of talk a little bit about why I chose a topic I did why chose write out what I wrote about but yeah so I have my laptop here so I’m just gonna read what it says song called not for this essay it says this essay demonstrates your ability to write clearly and concisely on a selected topic that helps you distinguish yourself in your own voice what do you want the readers of your application to know about you apart from courses great and test scores choose the option that best helps you into that question I read an essay a normal of no more than 650 words using the prompt to inspire and structure your response remember 650 word is your limit not your goal and so there’s a ton of topics you can choose from and there’s one that even says like just let whatever you want but the one that I chose to write about is some students have a background identity interest or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it if this sounds like you then please share your story so I’m just gonna read my essay I am a mutt as an Asian Hispanic American I grew up clashing in all three directions I am a third of each identity and therefore not entirely of any as a youth I felt excluded from complete membership in any one group because I comprised aspects of the other two that did not fit in it just has a mixture of identities complicated how people viewed me the way I was treated and how I viewed myself when I was younger my dad spoke in Spanish to me so I could grow up bilingual however when I started school I became embarrassed about using it even in my home I started ignoring my dad when he addressed me in Spanish and lost some languages I grew older throughout grade school I would bring all Asian snacks to school and was teased but then at the same time was picked on by my Asian relatives for holding chopsticks like a white person in the fifth grade I was placed in the class at the greater number of Hispanic students while the other class was entirely Caucasian my class was much slower paced and I was frustrated being there at my high school with Hispanic students tended to be stereotyped as lower performing students multiple teachers including math and science before knowing me talk down to me until the end of the first grading period when it was evident I was a good student all these experiences were challenging they brought in my self-awareness and self-acceptance of who I was I now recognize my diversity as an asset I realized that my experiences allowed me to connect build relationships with and value people from different backgrounds rather than just tolerating the negative stereotypes that I grew up with I am now confident and ready to challenge them in particular I realize that Hispanic females are underrepresented in the engineering field and part of this is due tonight to the negative societal views of Hispanics and woman interestingly my dad came from a time when the barriers for Hispanic engineers were even greater born in Puerto Rico he struggled through poverty with little education or support in addition because he was the first person in his family to obtain a college degree he did not even have role models to inspire him or to follow he eventually graduated from college and became a very successful electrical engineer with two masters degrees he still often faces biases and had to continually and has to continually prove his credibility in the workplace despite his education expertise and work experience while his success story inspires me it is not my own I was fortunate to have access to a strong educational around Wisconsin support from my family so my challenges are not identical to my dad’s however there continues to be unjustified stereotyping of Hispanics and women in the professional environment my dad’s generation represents the first movement of Hispanics breaking the initial barriers in the stem field I consider myself a part of a secondary movement whose goal is to shape a stem community that completely embraces Hispanics in particular Hispanic woman and whose goal is to motivate those like myself who would otherwise be discouraged to take this path I am very interested in engineering is I have a love for the math and sciences my hope is to be a successful Hispanic female engineer that not only gain fulfillment in a field that I enjoy but also has a larger impact on society I want to normalize the acceptance of Hispanics women and Hispanic women in STEM simultaneously increasing the confidence of these individuals in their ability to pursue their goals although growing up was sometimes complicated and confusing because of my diversity today I’m grateful for my uniqueness and the broader perspective and sense of empowerment it has given me to influence and change society so that was my essay and when I was trying to think about what to write about um so something that is very important to me is my identity but I didn’t want to just keep it like very surface level and talk about like oh yeah I grew up with different backgrounds in you value diversity and then like just kind of stop there because that’s kind of a very like typical essay to write if you’re writing about your background so I wanted to include all aspects of my life so I um included like some short anecdotes about things happen me when I was little and how that kind of shaped me into like going into high school and then after that and then I kind of went a new went into how I want to take those experiences and apply it to a future career and then I also kind of mentioned like what I’m passionate about kind of how I want to shape society upon what would be graduating from Stanford or whatever college I would end up choosing how I like and really passionate about increasing minority representation and stem and just in you know in different STEM careers and then I kind of talked about how other than a family where my dad has lost his job multiple times being in the field sometimes he would be at the like the top level system but then he would be the one let go and then there I don’t know I just experience certain things in my life that kind of still showed that those things are still an issue so I kind of talked about that okay so um I think maybe sometimes the perception is that a lot of people who get into schools like Harvard and like Stanford who are from maybe more underrepresented background like like the Hispanic community maybe either are from a lower-income family or are the first in their family to go to college most situations that are definitely valid a lot of if you can go to a top school like not having anyone else in your family who has gone to college like that’s I mean you think that’s super cool but that’s also not the only people who get into these schools from those different kinds of backgrounds like a lot of people who go to my school because I go to school I went to school in the city who were from minority background a lot of them were from lower-income communities and they you know they rose above maybe their situation in order to get into these um into these universities and that’s super awesome but that’s not really my story like I I was fortunate I live in a middle-class family in the suburbs in Texas and so those things were not something that I had to overcome I had a lot of work from my family and I had a pretty good education I grew up in the suburbs not where I went to school and I don’t that doesn’t have to be your story for you to get it you know whatever story you have is valid and unique and everyone is passionate about something so it doesn’t you know if that’s not your story that doesn’t mean that you’re not gonna get in so it’s just I just want to try my essay about something that only I could write about and when you like and I send this to a lot of people because I just think like you can’t really take it even if you wanted to because it’s very just specific to me so advice for when you’re trying to think I want to write your comment up essay about if you’re about to apply to college I think a good place to start is like what are you passionate about in your life it can be your identity maybe it’s a job you have maybe it’s an intern you did or some work you do in the community or just maybe like something that you see in your community that you’re passionate about and want to reform just what are you passionate about that is the main thing I don’t you should have sit down and think what’s the like coolest like most flashy thing in my life because mine’s not really talking about like my accomplishments you’re like my work I think or anything it’s more just like Who I am what I’m passionate about and what I want to do in the future the other advice I have for your essay is to make sure you have different eyes on it you know I got my essay edited by both of my parents who are both really smart people so they both edited my essays and then I also I have teacher ed in my essay who I didn’t know very well it was just an English teacher in my school because I kind of wanted an unbiased opinion to see if somebody who didn’t know me could still understand my story from that I say because my admissions officers obviously they’re not going to know me prior to meeting my essays so I wanted to see if you know somebody who literally had no idea who I was would still be able to get my story and the message and like that everything made sense because whenever I’m in here my mom’s reading it like I know what I’m trying to say she knows what I’m trying to say so it kind of makes it a little bit more difficult to distinguish things like that and then also young people to help cappucino a little grammar mistakes and things that when you’re reading it over and over you might not be able to catch don’t feel like if your your essay in one sitting I definitely look at the topic thought about what I want to write about talk to my mom about what I want to write about kind of like brainstorm different elements and I want to incorporate it’s definitely a process don’t don’t like get stressed out that gets to do it in one sitting literally I think I copy and pasted the topic into a document save it and close my laptop and just thought about it for two weeks before I looked at it again so definitely start early I think I like started at the beginning of my senior year just thinking about it because it is a process but also don’t feel like you need to work on your essay I was day like think about ideas let them sit with them process and then go back and revisit and also I know if for me it was important I glad in my essays but I only have three people out of it which wasn’t a lot you don’t want anyone to take away your voice definitely listen to suggestions but don’t let anyone make their essay in their voice you know still keep it in your voice and what you want to talk about so I think I guess like that’s all the advice I really have for that specific I said I was also accepted to Johns Hopkins University biomedical engineering and University of Michigan College of Engineering with this specific I say because I didn’t apply to that many Komarov schools so all I will also have more videos in the future about my Stanford supplements my statistics everything like that I’m going to be interviewing some of my friends I have friends going to Yale to USC to rise so I’m gonna be interviewing them too so you guys can have just kind of a overall like a broader opinion on if you’re going applying to a top school this fall or in the coming future follow me on Instagram and you can feel free to give me like any personal questions you have [Music]

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